Downtown - Comments

I loved this =]
Liked how different people can take different things from it
Like her ballet shoes at the start so pristine and new then at the end they could be ruined but she doesnt care i like the meaning behind the object =]
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This reminds me of Billy Joel's "Uptown Girl" :)

Does flash fiction mean that it's like a one shot but with a certain amount of words?
If not, I think you should write more.
Like, now. (:

And about Lillian:
I think she's a bit of a rebellious princess, so to say. Like she's lived her life having everything handed to her in her perfect little bubble, but that's not enough for her. So she decides to go out on her own for a bit, and find some dangerous trouble, with a certain Mr William Beckett. And she likes violin. But not really, because playing violin is hard and hurts your arm..

And yes, amazingly written as always.
And if this is a one-shot type thing, I think you should make it into a full story.

[I even looked it up, I just confused myself..]
(:
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This is amazing. I think that the shortness of it is really effective.
It kind of reminds me of Romeo and Juliet because they seem to have such different lives and it looks like her father definitely wouldn't approve of that boy lol

Anyway, I think you should write more 'flash fiction'.

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I ADORE THIS ALREADY!

It wouldn't have anything to do with our favourite, gorgeous, lead singer would it? lol.
I thought it might.

As to Lillian;
In my opinion it seems like she's from a high-class (or at least well off) family. A long way from downtown. She seems to represent her "gated community" bubble and is curious (i feel like she's like Ariel from The Little Mermaid, longing to see what all the fuss is about on the other side) Possibly motherless? Because only her father is mentioned which is unusual. She seems to be a good student, involved in extra curricular activites (violin) and has been brought up to take her of her appearance (ruining good shoes)

I'm really interested as to where it'll go?
loveee xxx