Pick-Me-Up - Comments

this is really good
it could be the begining of a really good story...
just puting it out there...

This was soo beautiful.
I think it would be wonderful if it was to be turned into a full story

I like this a lot. i can relate to this a bit...
At first before i rad the whole thing i freaked a little bit though....

because my name's Danielle , too.

I'm not quite sure what to say to that.

Amazing writing as always, you write everything so alive. As if you can imagine being in the next room to them, experiencing it first hand.
The subject i thought was a bit iffy, but that might be because my perception of Will is that he wouldn't put up with that "every night" as he claims her behaviour occurs.
But it was a brilliant one shot. The conflict in it was perfect (not something to work on unless you find it difficult with a two-person conflict...like shouty-shouty from both sides).
i dunno what else to say. More one shots please. :)
xx

Oh my, that was amazing!!
You always the write so awesomely.
I'm a bit jealous.