October 23rd, 2008 at 09:54pm
It's...different. Not really my style.
Sort of confusing for an intro/first chapter. I kept trying to figure out if they were two wolves talking...or two people talking...or two...I don't know what. If I were...well if I were more intrigued, I would read more into it. But still, all the dialogue in the first chapter catches the attention of the reader, and makes them want to read more into it to understand more about the characters. Unfortunately, there's too much dialogue, I think. If you used some more description and a little more writing into what's actually going on, it would be better. :tehe: I like the overuse of the word bitch.
Swell!