Writing Advice? {Femmeslash} - Comments

I like this. It's good. Advice I could would say, is give it depth, like an actual story. I hate reading femmes that are all about sex. -_-

Okay, I'm not so good on advice, but firstly I'll say, this sounds very good. :)
Only bit of advice, the first paragraph verges on being purple prose to me, so be careful of that.
Eric, x