“…and suddenly, everything went black.” - Comments

Again, I apologize for my vulgarity, but I was a little annoyed when I wrote this.

Well, that's a little offensive.

I probably would have agreed with you, but the person is not stupid just because they write it that way.

If it bothers you that much, maybe give them constructive criticism without dropping the f-bomb everywhere, and being polite.

Nah, I haven't. I read it all the time though. I just feel like it's a lack of a potential space for great description. I feel like it'd be out of place to mention it. Who am I to tell anyone how to write? No one. It's just one of my preferences not to read is all.

Wow. You sure feel strongly about the usage of "and suddenly, everything went black". Have you told any of the writers about maybe changing that in their story?

Sometimes it's good to cut down on fluff, and sometimes it's good to have fluff. It depends on the writer's individual style. I personally can't stand too much fluff; it's a huge turn off.

Haha I understand.

Sorry about the language. I was a bit worked up when I was typing angrily xD

Please censor your journals.

Although I agree, it's a bit tiresome reading the same line repetetively.

baha that's funny xDD Good point though!