That Thing They Call English - Comments

Thanks for the "Criticism" but I dont really want it, this was my personal english work of how I decided to express myself, criticism isnt what I wanted.

It's all right. There are a fair few technical errors; I'm not sure whether that's an issue of grammatical knowledge or simply a lot of typos. There are a couple really good lines. I really liked "snowflake memories," though I'd like to have some concrete memories to tie that to, you know? It's a lot of abstractions. Mostly well worded, though with some awkward phrasing. I feel like it begs for glimpses of detail.