Addressed to Skittles.Overdose: 54 people clicked on your story, not read it. Only ten people are following it, obviously. The reader number for the first chapter is shit.
My story is on chapter five, and only like 4 comments. Heh. Makes me wonder why I bother, but I'm not going to delete it. I'll keep writing it, but i don't htink i'm going to be updating as often. I'm writing it mostly 'cause I like to write whatthe story is about. I don't exactly care much if people read it. so.. yeah.
Mibba is like that, people start reading your stories and stop. My story "When Did This Go Missing" started with 59 readers and now it's down to 10. I'm not sure why but mibba users are just like. I'm sure you're a great writer but some people are too lazy to comment. And don't start writing what people want you should write what you want, it'll make you feel better and people will come around soon.
Well...first of all, you shouldn't write for other people. You should write for yourself and write what you want. People will be able to tell and it will come out better.
As for the other things, I haven't read your work and can't give specifics...but just keep writing. You'll get better with practice.