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Hello! I'm struggling with some of the wordings in a poem I wrote and I was wondering if you could read it and let me know if you have any suggestions. It just seems like it isn't flowing right and you seem to know a lot about poetry.

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I picked Huxley :)

Thank you for sharing that with me. I really do like that. It's unique. Things definitely turned out well for you and him then!

Just out of curiosity, what does your username mean?

I believe you were watching or reading a story of mine and I just got back on after like a 3 year hiatus. I scanned through your stories and read it ^_^

No problem, It was a great poem :)

You're welcome! Sorry to hear that you can't come out to the rest of your family.

Thank you for participating in my candy bowl! I'm glad you liked the friend clause.

I hope you're night is going well!

Your reviews have made me light up & thank you deeply for them. ccccc:

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I tried commenting on your blog, but I don't know if it actually worked or not because Mibba is being weird. If you ever want to talk about poetry or even just general chit chat I'm always up for making new friends :)

Thank you for the comment on In the Grand Scheme of Things.

I do understand what you mean, but your biggest point is something I did on purpose. It was supposed to linger in the same place because that's what's wrong with the character telling the story, he can't move on. I think it might be an acquired taste, that story. However, I do really appreciate the time and effort you took to read it and leave constructive criticism. I don't receive constructive criticism often so I definitely still appreciated it. There's just nothing I can improve on what you pointed out because I did that on purpose.

Hi! I want to say thanks for your comments on "Little Girl Lost", which may be my favorite poem I've written and "Never Ending Cycle", which is one of my weaker drabbles, honestly.

I'm so glad you liked those first two lines in the poem, I had the first one stuck in my head for what felt like forever. Hmm, I may try to branch that poem out into a sort of series to learn about the character more.

You're right with the second drabble, it was a rant.

Anyway, thanks for your concrit. :) I'll definitely revise and fix the grammatical mistakes.

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First off,I wan to give you a big big big hug! Thank you for your comment on Fallen Warrior! I'm so glad to have such honest feedback. You're the best!
And, I've attended to the mistakes, so thank you for that as well. Love you for your honesty!

Comment #2:
First of, thank you for catching all those errors. I don't even remember seeing them. I'll have to fix them later.

Also, thanks for the feedback on my description. That's a thing I try to work hard on getting, so I'll be especially be keeping that in mind. And I agree, it's lacking a little in "Exhale." That's mainly because for the assignment it was for, I could only make it two paragraphs. So I didn't want to make them super thick, as I thought it would make it annoying to read. But I think I may being taking another look at it soon, and adding to it. So I'll keep the advice in mind.

Thanks again.

Comment #1:
Thanks for the feedback on my poem. I like to know what I can improve on in my writing, and I'm glad to get some con-crit (is that the correct term?) that is both helpful and understandable.

And thanks for the explanation of iambic pentameter. I'm still new to understanding meters and feet in poetry, and it's something I never really paid attention to until I had to write that poem (as well as some others) for the class, as I think I mentioned. Not to mention, when I wrote it, I was just thankful to get to a total ten syllables per line. If I ever write another poem of this style, I'll remember to watch the unaccented/accented syllables. I think I understand what you were trying to say about it. You're saying it's unaccented, then accented, and then repeat that form another four times, for a total of five (times). Is that correct, am I reading it right?

Thanks for your comment on Love = Enough?... That's probably the most critical comment I ever received on a poem :P But it's okay... I know it's not as interesting as some of the things I've read on here, or even some of the things I've written, but this was more about getting the message across. I just wanted to be honest. Thanks though :)

I heard you're getting married and I just wanted to say I am happy for the both of you and I wish you many happy years with your marriage! :)

Neil Gaiman is my hero, dude.
I just got his "Make Good Art" speech in the mail the other day.

So, I totally 110% agree with on "BabySkulls" latest blog, but it won't let me reply to you and tell you so :(
So, I'll tell you here, haha

I've periodically read their blog for months and they have a habit of venting about everything under the sun and thinking that's going to change anything, rather than facing the problem headon.
I'm glad you said it so eloquently because I'd honestly have been a little mean about it :X