Thanks for the story comment. My goal is to make each chapter better than the last. And all the editing and layout I thank my bestie Robin 'The Sidekick'. :D
I couldn't find any of spelling errors in the first chapter. Do you mind sending me a message at some of the ones you found? I wrtie my story in a Word Doc. before posting it. I thought I had caught them all. :/
She started over because her entire family died and she didn't see the point in staying where she was, which is talked about in the first chapter. It's sort of implied, I figured, that when ones family dies, they must begin a new life.
Yes, I meant fixing. I don't think it is awful. I just think that if you had a white story content background, and not grey, it would look much better and would have been easier to read if you changed the font color to the darker grey background color.
I couldn't tell if those were her thoughts, you should use italics to make it more obvious because I couldn't really tell...
hi. You put on my journal that you wanted to do a comment swap (like two days ago I think.). I just wanted you to know I'm not jipping you out of a swap. You just never commented on my story and I've been jipped like that before and don't want to be jipped again. If you'd rather just not participate, that's fine. Just don't reply! lol :) Or you can reply and say you'd rather not. I just didn't want you thinking I'm a horrible swapper. lol :)
It's quite a fascinating read; like it should be a movie. XD
Hahaha, well, I just finished reading what you had of Forsaken so far, and I had to comment again. *Excuse me while I fangirl.*
I love it! I think I have a new favorite story!!
Hahaha, I do have more written, but I figured I should pace myself keep myself ahead of the game just in case. So I'm not scrambling to get an update out in time...
Oh, but Mission J takes place after chapter 11 in the other story, which has Russians and action, if you're interested.
Sorry, must get back to this awesome zombie story...It's called Forsaken?? Maybe you heard of it?? =P (I HEART DUKE.)
Ah, the Russians! XD I guess this was meant to be! =P
...though in my story, my character K had beaten them...(BUT it was well-deserved; they weren't nice Russians >_<)
I just realized you updated more, so I'm flying to check those out!!!