February 26th, 2010 at 02:27am
I get that your fragments are intentional and I see what you're trying to do, but the way I see it is that fragments should almost be able to be their own sentence. Like, a point strong enough to stand on his own. Sometimes yours were, and sometimes they weren't.
Anyway, I'm glad you didn't find my review too harsh and that it helped you.
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