Hmmmmm good point. But the only reason he used his power the way he did was because Germany lost the first World War and he has always has animosity towards Jews.
I don't know why I didn't think to do that before! I normally try to make them up, but I am kind of debating if it should take place in Japan or America
[i]He was now, unintentionally of course, part of what killed her. And for that he would never forgive himself[/i]
That part even teared me up! Oh, how heartbreaking. It's so sad that this pure boy is forced to go through this- this atrocious thin that his mother believes is necessary purification. So depressing.
I love the way you write. And one thing I need to give you big props on: great name choice. Not only is it unique, but it also really makes it seem more realistic. It's a name that someone living in Germany would have. A lot of people don't know how important a name can be in a story. So go you.
But, yes, I'm loving your updates so far. They're intriguing and easy to read. I like how it's not super long. All I noticed were that you had a few grammar errors but that's it.