fallen-angel-1995 / Comments

Hey! I was wondering if you could read Trisha-ValoX69's and my story The Misadventures of Padfoot and Prongs! Thanks!
http://stories.mibba.com/read/414182/The-Misadventures-of-Padfoot-and-Prongs/

Omg yay updates ! I could kill you with hush right now :p nobody's been updating I've been dying lol

Hello :)

Just going through the comments on the story called [b]Angel[/b]. Just to let you know that I am currently writing the next chapter and it will be up on Mibba in a couple of days.

[i]P.S ~ Keep a look out :) [/i]

Ok :) I trust ya :) hope you have fun anyway :) sorry I'm just a impatient sod lol but yer have a good time away I'll be excitedly awaiting the updates :) is it just the single chapter for each or a few?? Xx

Not a problem :) I just fell in love with them :3 but 2 weeks!?? Damn ima have to pester some other writer :3 have fun away :) hurry back :p I wants my updates :p

Hey can you update fallen love soon please I love that story and miss the updates and I've only just realized you have other stories going off so ima nosy at them and beg for more updates :p update soon please

It's no problem. I just... I really hope it wasn't too much. Didn't want to sound overly critical or anything. If it was too much, just ignore me. I mean no harm. :)

But that's really interesting. I didn't know about the apostrophes. But about the 'your' and 'you're', that might not be right if the apostrophe rules are different, so you might not want to take my word on that one.

Alright. :) So, this is mostly just what I see in the introduction. Most likely, it's the same as what happens in the other chapters, too. And I really don't mean to sound picky, so... these are just what I noticed, is all. Little things, you know. :)

"Your" and "you're" get mixed up.
Some of the contractions are missing apostrophes ("can't" was missing one).
Sometimes words are a bit messed up, like using "and" instead of "an" or using "the" instead of "there".
"Had began" isn't correct (but this might be one that is different for us). "Began" is used when "had" isn't. When a form of "had" is there, use "begun".
There are a few missing commas.
"I" should always be capitalized (even in stuttering).
"Nights events" should've been possessive, so it would've been "night's events".

Besides that, it's just typos, I think. Occasionally using an apostrophe instead of quotation marks, things like that.

Hope that helped. :)

Thank you :) I'll read another one then :)

Nice become a friend :3

Okay :)

I just saw :)
Ah no! There's just got to be a twist. Let me know when there is an update :)

I've commented on your story, just waiting for one back :)

I loved Fallen Love! Please keep writting &updating it((:

Sure I'll swap. :) (Saw comment on my journal.)

Thx for the comment

Stay has been Updated

Hey
Thanks for the story comment
And dont worry about not knowing them
It's cool <3

Aw thank you for the journal comment it meant a lot :D

Not a problem I loved it :) it's a great book! I'm glad there is more :)