November 4th, 2011 at 12:53am
fallen-angel-1995 / Comments
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Omg yay updates ! I could kill you with hush right now :p nobody's been updating I've been dying lolAugust 30th, 2011 at 02:40am
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Hello :)
Just going through the comments on the story called [b]Angel[/b]. Just to let you know that I am currently writing the next chapter and it will be up on Mibba in a couple of days.
[i]P.S ~ Keep a look out :) [/i]August 15th, 2011 at 01:15pm -
Ok :) I trust ya :) hope you have fun anyway :) sorry I'm just a impatient sod lol but yer have a good time away I'll be excitedly awaiting the updates :) is it just the single chapter for each or a few?? XxAugust 13th, 2011 at 09:19pm
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Not a problem :) I just fell in love with them :3 but 2 weeks!?? Damn ima have to pester some other writer :3 have fun away :) hurry back :p I wants my updates :pAugust 13th, 2011 at 03:21pm
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Hey can you update fallen love soon please I love that story and miss the updates and I've only just realized you have other stories going off so ima nosy at them and beg for more updates :p update soon pleaseAugust 12th, 2011 at 10:12pm
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It's no problem. I just... I really hope it wasn't too much. Didn't want to sound overly critical or anything. If it was too much, just ignore me. I mean no harm. :)
But that's really interesting. I didn't know about the apostrophes. But about the 'your' and 'you're', that might not be right if the apostrophe rules are different, so you might not want to take my word on that one.July 18th, 2011 at 12:49am -
Alright. :) So, this is mostly just what I see in the introduction. Most likely, it's the same as what happens in the other chapters, too. And I really don't mean to sound picky, so... these are just what I noticed, is all. Little things, you know. :)
"Your" and "you're" get mixed up.
Some of the contractions are missing apostrophes ("can't" was missing one).
Sometimes words are a bit messed up, like using "and" instead of "an" or using "the" instead of "there".
"Had began" isn't correct (but this might be one that is different for us). "Began" is used when "had" isn't. When a form of "had" is there, use "begun".
There are a few missing commas.
"I" should always be capitalized (even in stuttering).
"Nights events" should've been possessive, so it would've been "night's events".
Besides that, it's just typos, I think. Occasionally using an apostrophe instead of quotation marks, things like that.
Hope that helped. :)July 17th, 2011 at 01:13am -
Thank you :) I'll read another one then :)July 11th, 2011 at 11:48pm
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Nice become a friend :3July 11th, 2011 at 12:39am
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Okay :)July 10th, 2011 at 11:24pm
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I just saw :)
Ah no! There's just got to be a twist. Let me know when there is an update :)July 10th, 2011 at 11:22pm -
I've commented on your story, just waiting for one back :)July 10th, 2011 at 11:03pm
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I loved Fallen Love! Please keep writting &updating it((:July 7th, 2011 at 01:15am
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Sure I'll swap. :) (Saw comment on my journal.)July 6th, 2011 at 10:03pm
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Thx for the commentJuly 3rd, 2011 at 11:09pm
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Stay has been UpdatedJune 10th, 2011 at 03:46am
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Hey
Thanks for the story comment
And dont worry about not knowing them
It's cool <3June 4th, 2011 at 10:50am -
Aw thank you for the journal comment it meant a lot :DJune 2nd, 2011 at 02:53am
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Not a problem I loved it :) it's a great book! I'm glad there is more :)June 1st, 2011 at 02:39am
http://stories.mibba.com/read/414182/The-Misadventures-of-Padfoot-and-Prongs/