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sorry, but i will be discontinuing my story 'trois d'eiffel'.
however, this is not the end..
i've found another author, StrawberryJacque, who will take over my story on her page.
it should be up on saturday, june 19th.
so, go to her page and subscribe.
thanks for the wonderful opportunity to write for you.
it has been wonderful.

hey.
i'm thinking about deleting my story, "trois d'eiffel".
i've just outgrown it.
i was just wondering if you maybe wanted to take over the idea.
:)

reply if interested.

Thank you so much for your comment, your help is really appreciated. I do know that my stories need much more editing, but by the end of it all I just want it over with, post and done, you know? My style isn't the greatest, as I find myself writing in a... Well, in a "professional" manner, I suppose is the only way I can put it, then I suddenly switch to a much more casual tone. It's problematic, I know.
I also find it interesting you see my story as being told by third-person omniscient. To me, it's third person limited, but I suppose Edward's powers do backfire that setting.
... Where was I? I apologize for the rambling. Anyway, thank you, I probably won't edit the chapters, but I'll keep your advice in mind while writing the future ones. Once again, I'm a lazy writer. Thank you, and good night.

Thanks for the story comment.

omg I'm such a douche! Sorry 'bout that!
...wait, jazz banjo?? Dude, that is intense =]

aww. Thanks so much!
I will. ♥

Lol, yeah jazz music can definitely be awesome =].
Dude, you got yourself a part in the Robin, Boy Virgin world. If I can swing it in the story, a spaztic bongo playin' chick is gonna make a cameo.

mhmm =[ unfortunately

sorry >.<
i just don't find the criticism here is constructive
all it is is people going "omg thats so awesome!" or "i love it write more right this very second!" like ten seconds after i post then i get pestered to post more
there's no actual useful constructive criticism
and people get mad when i try to give it because they think i'm "being mean to them" for not telling them their story is perfect
so it's in my head until I give it to someone that will actually edit it
then i will hope to get something published several years down the road
so you can read my stuff then ;)

I won't be posting it at all
sometimes it's good to just write stories for yourself

i'm working on a new story, but it won't be posted here.
otherwise i haven't been writing much because i've been going through some family issues and don't feel up to writing.

as always. anything in particular, you mean?

Yay for happy dances! I'm glad you found me again. :)

"I got up in the morning, and went straight to the mirror to see what I look like"- obviously through that overly clique dream that sent a vision to the past/future (that has NOTHING to do with the STORY- if there is one- at ALL) they forgot what they look like, you see.
"I have hubungus breasts, and I'm really skinny. I'm not anorexic, but I can't eat anything ever. I never gain weight. So all the guys love me and all the girls hate me. Even though my best friends are girls."

End of Chapter 1.

This feels really desperate to say and will probably seem so as well (given I'm one of the ones who you commented about and stuff. :P) But it drives me up the wall when there are excessive typos as well.

A simple mistake like than instead of then, or throughly instead of thoroughly I can take, you know? Typos by one or two letters.
But...I -refuse- to read any story, unless directly asked nicely (then I'll suffer through cause I'm a sucker who can't say "no") that is written mostly in chatspeak...or...the first one or two paragraphs is/are about how the main character looks.
How sexxay she is. ;o

Not many people, have ever found (or if they did they've never said) anything they wanted to critic in my stories before. Which is why, I do really appreciate when you did.

I was wondering, and hoping, if you could continue to give me constructive and helpful critic, it's with critic I will be able to improve in the future.

Uhmmm.... Sure?

I dunno.... I just feel like I'm constantly falling... my eyes are watering... I just feel miserable.... I don't think it helps either to say that my youngest dog kept me up all night by sleeping in my room. He just doesn't know how to stay still. Bleh.

Yeah, I think I'll leave it for now... I'm really dizzy right now, I have a headache, and the medicine the doctor gave me has this chemical I'm allergic to... So If I do anything, It'll be update, if that.

Wait- which chapters???????
Uhrm thanks?