Could you guys give me constructive criticism on this? - Comments

  • lightmyfag

    lightmyfag (100)

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    Honestly, It could use work. Its kind of all over the place and it sounds like stuff I've heard before. YOu have talent so if you work on polishing it and making it more succinct then I think it could be much better.
    August 21st, 2007 at 03:01am