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  • avadakedanielle

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    Wow, scary. But epic :D
    December 10th, 2009 at 10:06pm
  • Zenagi

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    Ah,

    : ) My how true this is.
    Men and women alike can be avaricious in various ways. This is one that many succumb and become victim to. :3
    August 4th, 2009 at 07:18am
  • the asphyxiation.

    the asphyxiation. (250)

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    nice : )
    July 28th, 2009 at 01:59am
  • dark_knight_16

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    you're poems are relly captivating, they make you feel like your the one its happeneing to
    July 24th, 2009 at 06:57pm
  • hoping for hail.

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    love it :]
    except choose should be choice, i think
    July 23rd, 2009 at 07:20pm
  • tattod_heart.

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    It flows rather evenly except for stanza three.
    The 3rd line in every stanze rhymed with 'game' except that one.

    Also the first stanza sounds best because its goes AAB then the second goes CDD and that throws me off.

    Little tweaks here and there couldnt hurt right?

    Please don't take this the wrong way, and if you want nothing to do with what I just said don't reply and just ignore me.
    July 22nd, 2009 at 09:48pm
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