Hey Daddy - Comments

Wow. That's really deep. I know where the girl in your poem's coming from but, having a similar story myself. You portrayed her point really well. I love it. :)

wow... that one mad me almost cry lol. -whipes a tear away- you are truly a genius Aaron. you are my new favorite poet lol. (:

Interesting.

I really like it.
It was awesome how you showed how subtle choices lead to big results and how badly a child needs a good envrionment to grow up in.

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Wow. This was like...dude, I cried.
You really have a talent! This was very creative, and I loved it!

i really like it.

OH.MY.GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!! this is AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i <3 <3 <3 it!!!!!!

Amazing. Just amazing. Veryyyyy good work of art. =D

Weirdly enough, I saw that coming after the first stanza. I wish I could write like you Aaron :/ <3333

I shall comment just to make you happy. ;)
I like it, makes me wanna cry a bit. xx

wow hun. really really good. made me want to cry. keep it up hun.
x

Very well written Aaron, keep it up.

This still makes me cry.

My mum died one year and a twenty days ago. She died of breast cancer, that she'd been battling since I was in year five. My father withdrew into himself. He hardly talks to me now. I look just like my mum. On some days, it's just too much for him. It's on those days that we argue. My brother is worse. We fight nearly every day. My brother has put me in hospital once before. At least I had my friends to help me through that time. We moved recently. Now I live in Perth, next door to my mum's only sister, my Aunt Kaye. I hope my dad doesn't get as bad as the father in your poem. I hope my brother dies. Not that I'd ever kill him. I can't hurt him. I hope he dies but he's still my brother and deep down I still love him. I can't even fight back some days.

Enough of my life story. Your poem was very well written, it's amazing. You really captured my attention within just a few lines. By grade three I had tears in my eyes. I started crying as the mother got cancer. When she died, I was bawling my eyes out. I still am.

It's so emotional. You did it very well. You weren't kidding when you said it was a masterpiece.

Hey. That is brilliant! Im crying. Well done.

It getts sader ever time i see it. Sometime i wonder what made you think of something like this. but eh it doesnt matter it's so strong and sad. it makes you think about all those poor sick people out there. but i still love it as much as i do the first time i saw it. You did a wonderful job!

....WOW! That was amazing, I agree with Mrs. Krabs. You portrayed the character very very well. Bravo

Oh wow.
Emotional & pretty intense.
You did a good job of protraying the moods and emotions you wanted to.
This was really good, seriously.
Own life experiences or what? :/

Its good man. Well done.