The Mother I Wish I Had - Comments

-Is declaring himself your mommy now-

I dont think I need to comment to let u know that you are a wonderful poet :) I hope you keep making new poems cuz these are absolutely amazing!

wow, emotional. I cant say that i relate to this but i understand how you feel through your words. Good job. Keep up the great work.

ahhh <333

Wow this was a really good poem. Really powerful.

everything will get better for you eventually hun.
It's horrible you have to go through this

yeah that line made me go "wow" too.
great words! great poem! the comments say everything (:

wow. I started tearing up. This is very good... I know how yew feel... My mom is... Im not getting into it...

That was really good (: Very emotional.

wow I loved it:) this line was really just um, impactful ya know? IT just was like "wow" when i read this line:

The mother I wish I had would be kind and true,
she wouldn't make sex and drugs more important than you.

the only thing I might consider changing is maybe the beginning of each line. maybe try taking out "the mother I wish I had wouldn't" at the beginning of each line. I know your trying to use the repetativeness for emphasis but i dont know. Maybe just try taking it out all but the first and last lines and see how it looks. it might be better the way you have it but im just throwing stuff out there because I always like someone to tell me one thing I could maybe change in my work to maybe make it better:)

but beautifully written and I LOVE it:)

wow thatds really deep and intense, but really great and heartfelt

wowz willy <3

wow... this is really good, and its one of the better poems i've read on here

Dood...that's deep.
XD

awwuh D:
i love the emotion, even if its on the sadish part.
very well written tho. (:

wow li love this

This is so emotional.
One of the most emotional and powerful poems I have ever read.
I'm sorry for what you've been through.
You are very strong.

wow thats really deep but its good and sad