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  • Duckie_MaybeMemories

    Duckie_MaybeMemories (100)

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    This is great (I dont throw that word around to much to other poets) but, it would be a better poem if, where you put all the commas, press enter and change them to stanza's. Then it would look less like a journal entry, and more like a poem.
    -Duckie_maybememories xox
    October 10th, 2009 at 06:33am
  • Kaitybabi

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    This person you're writing to...is very lucky. I love your wording, and heart put into the poem. Awesome job.
    September 22nd, 2009 at 01:28am
  • Borderline

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    Who ever your friend is, they sure are lucky. that is such a sweet peom.

    i really like the first line of the second last paragraph.
    September 22nd, 2009 at 01:24am
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