The Vampire (Sestina) - Comments

This is sooo cool. Vampires, awesome! No mercy, sad, but awesome!!! Coolness. CU soon!

Whoa, you should write more Vampire poems when you can, cause that was really good and intense.

GetMeFiveBrightRoses: It's kinda hard to do that... I'm only allowed to end each line with the same words in a particular order. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sestina to check out the form! If I were to do that, I would have to do the whole poem over again... with different words... The thing is, I love this one sooooooo much! I'm actually going to try and get it published!

Mandie-san- Domo Arigato Gozaimasu!

Thank you very much!

And to the rest of you: Thank you for commenting, if you want more peom's like this, please give me six words (like Rose, Vampire, Moon, Trembled, Blood, and Alive!!) and I'll write one... or attempt...

Omoshiroi. Daisuki^^
[i]interesting. I like it^^[/i]

Vivid! Vivid! XD maybe you can emphasise more on the feeling of those fangs? the pain, the blurry visions.. and .. the last phrase should be the last line to maximise effect! write more soon!! you have potential!

it was awesome!!!!

I liiiiike iiiiiiit!!!!!

How was it confuzing? Sorry, I just want to improve my work.

How can I fix it?

that was kind of creepy, but then again I like creepy things :) This was good even though the ending was a bit confusing, keep up the good work