It could very well end with the second to last stanza. But if you want to keep the last you should remove the parenthesis and the very last line to “You smile contented that you did nothing wrong” because I think that flows better. Personally I think you could just skip the last stanza though because it doesn’t really seem to contribute that much and, like you said, it’s a tad forced. But apart from your trouble with the ending; great poem :)
October 30th, 2007 at 03:48am