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  • The Warden's Wife

    The Warden's Wife (100)

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    It has a pretty good flow to it, and the idea is a really good one, but it needs a bit of work. A little more capitalization and grammar and such =)
    Uhhm...A name....
    Well, I'm sure the ones I come up with won't be good enough, but I can think of Drowning or maybe Within the Fog like is in one of the lines? I don't know, I can't think of something super awesome right now xD
    February 25th, 2010 at 05:08am
  • feelthatfire11

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    beautiful poem. maybe id name it, "waiting for death". or "drowning". noo idea really, just some suggestions. great pooem.
    February 25th, 2010 at 05:05am
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