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  • Sandii_x3

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    you made a typo..
    other than that..
    this is just fucking brilliant.
    i love it.
    <3
    September 11th, 2008 at 11:44am
  • Frankenstein

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    I think you're getting the hang of abstract noun use, which certainly improves it. A little imagery would bring this to life.
    January 14th, 2008 at 03:19am
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