The timing of the words are so precise that they cut a wound in my stomach. I'm so happy your ended the poem on a positive note because I was reading very deeply into your words and I started to feel depressed. Haha.
This is a amazing poem. The beat is perfect. The rhythm is perfect. Even the rhyming towards the end was so happy sounding that it made everything better. Well done! <3
"A man, a gun
No time to run"
The timing of the words are so precise that they cut a wound in my stomach. I'm so happy your ended the poem on a positive note because I was reading very deeply into your words and I started to feel depressed. Haha.
This is a amazing poem. The beat is perfect. The rhythm is perfect. Even the rhyming towards the end was so happy sounding that it made everything better. Well done! <3