Immortality Play - Comments

I love the rhyming scheme.
Beautiful job. (:

I see a very common suite in your writing.
You come at it hard, and you keep that pace untill the very last stanza, where suddenly the pace shallows and you allude to the begining.
I like the loop, and I think that you have a very promising future in poetry.
I love your words. : )

Have you ever considered trying to get anything published?
I'm not even kidding.
I'm quite glad you whored this out to me, since once again, the description and concept of this was purely amazing. :]

That was pure brilliance!