This was good, I enjoyed the concept of it and I think you wrote it very well. :)
A few mistakes though, it should be die, not dye. And I'm not sure Awimm is a word. :/
And the little dash/hyphens don't need to be at the beginning of every stanza.
But apart from those few things, this was really good. :D
A few mistakes though, it should be die, not dye. And I'm not sure Awimm is a word. :/
And the little dash/hyphens don't need to be at the beginning of every stanza.
But apart from those few things, this was really good. :D