Try Again (And Again, And Again) - Comments

Good poem,the only thing I would change.Is maybe i would shorten the length of the poem,it seems to be a run on poem.Meaning it's just a little to much.Way to many comma's are in the poem.Try not to work so hard,next time on the comma thing.evryone loves long poetry,but it has to worth going on over.if you feel like its to long yourself.Usually it is.just my opinion,but I think your work could be really good.maybe shorten and strengthen this poem to find perfection in it.

Wow. You have a [i]lot[/i] of comments as far as poems go, but I'm not surprised why.

This was really good! Very interesting style. I really enjoyed the last two stanzas, they happened to be my favorite.

I think a lot of people can easily relate to this seeing as almost everyone wants to be perfect for someone or something at one point in their life, and I feel like this was just a universal, "YES! We all try again, and again...and again, etc.
It reminded me of times that I've been through this.
Very good! Extremely well written :)
-Anna xo

This poem is pretty much perfect.
Ever notice how people love things that are all about them? xD
Well, this is ALL about me.
I hate being a disappointment half the time, and I love this because it is exactly how I feel when I disappoint somebody I care about, especially my father.

I really love this! Most of all for the reason that this poem really tells a story that I know a lot of people can probably relate to. You manage to sustain the rhythm throughout the poem, which is really important. Even in the first verse with the words, [i]'Force it away, shove it down, so what if you're a failure again'[/i] - you already had me loving this poem with the way you mixed the imagery of forcing something away, and the moral theme of the poem which is about failing and trying again.

I think you've depicted the cylce and struggle that many people have with writer's block, very well. It really made for an enjoyable and effective poem to read. (:

Reaaaly good! :D

WoW, that was truly a piece of work. It could relate to many people, especially students and such. It was wicked good.

That was beautiful, I love how it describes almost every moment I have messed up in life, and then had to repeat it.(and repeat it and repeat it) =P

Wow, I really like that a lot.