Doll - Comments

Definitely loving the creepiness in this poem :D
Its sort of light for me in the beginning but it gets darker and darker by each stanza which is definitely something I enjoyed.

I loved how you described her eyes like the ocean because I think most dolls have like brown or black eyes :l

Loved it <3

Oh, I loved the creepiness in this poem. Okay, for me it was creepy because I'm scared of dolls.
But your last 3 lines were most definitely the most powerful. They brought the whole poem together. It was a splendid poem

This was so creative. It kept me reading the whole time. And the detail you put into it was brilliant.
For some reason, it reminded me of the poem called "The Ruined Maid," by Thomas Hardy. I can't even say they have entirely similar themes, but I was thinking of it while I read it.

i really lked this
how you explained how perfect the doll was
and how in the end she figured out it was nothing more than just that, a doll
i dont know what it was, but i loved this!

This is particularly interesting. When taken at face value, it's a bit whimsical at the beginning, nostalgic all throughout, and it has a bit of a detached sadness near the end. But digging a little deeper, as you've made it easy enough to do, it's something else entirely. A bit darker, sadder, more real. The layering caused by the different ways to read it is really cool.
You've done a very great job with this! I think, from the ones I've read by you, this is perhaps my favorite! :D

I really was amazed by this. The features of the doll expressed, and in the end just shows how nothing's around forever. How even though her tune and phrase was the same, she was special enough that after once she wasn't forgotten, but simply loved till worn out.

I like the consistency of this. I like how you start with a meaning, and you follow it through. I like how this doesn't necessarily rhyme. I did like it very much.

You should seriously consider writing a book of poems and publishing it. You work is amazingly beautiful, and captivating. I absolutely love it. I love how when you write, you don't just write about random things, it seems as though you are writing from the heart and writing about things you truely care about and things that effect you. Like I said, your poems are amazing.
<3

I loved how in the beginning it was such simple and happy thoughts, but then at the end you put a picture in my head of a beautiful, yet broken doll. Amazing.

[i]She sang a pretty tune.
Always the same melody,
But such a sweet song[/i]
That's one of my favorites, ever.
The repetition, used as a way to emphasize, was brilliant, and really got the point across.
It's been said before, I really like how you leave this open for interpretation, depending on the reader. It's personal, but not specific.
I really enjoyed this.

Amazing job, as always. I really like this one and what it means. It's simple enough that anyone can still see the meaning behind it, but still poetic enough that it's beautiful. Well done. c:

I feel like this is in relation to heartbreak, and the way guys seem to play with girls until they succeed in breaking them in the end. I loved it. It's a different way of decribing things, certainly

you are lovely I enjoyed the tone and the imagery was striking I also like....I cant think of the word for it right now but I want to say meter... The pattern of the way the words sounded lol for lack of better definition.

I wish I could write poems as amazingly as you do. :) Yours are actually poetic and not just boring songs like mine. I adore your wording and this was really beautiful.