A Toast - Comments

GRAMMIT, WHY ARE YOU SUCH A BRILLIANT WRITER?!??!?!? STOPPIT. Once again, I'm left breathless. You really are one of the best writers on Mibba, EVARRR. Every poem that I've read by you, I wouldn't change in the slightest. Each word is perfect, and each line leaves me absolutely breathless.

Love. Brilliant. Real. Amazing.

I know you wanted constructive CRITISISM, but darling, all I can say is that you are talented in all the poems I have read so far. Your writing skills, amazing and very talented. The way you write, you capture the reader. The fact that you can do so in a poem is truly remarkable :) I loved this one too. I loved the first stanza. I don't know exactly why, but it jumped out at me and I was hooked :)

I used to write poems myself, but they are nothing compared to these ones :) You are talented, so please keep up this amazing work <3

This is remarkably beautiful, and you're right to be proud of this. I think my favorite stanza was the second. I loved how... layered it was. Like, the places her "dreams" went were one right after another, and that made for a very easy, flowing read. I also liked how the line "That settled into the ocean," tied directly into the line a few down about the sand between her toes.
I think I already said it, but the flow of this poem is great. Which, in a way, makes sense, as a good toast should flow easily too :)

I really enjoyed reading this, it's not just like every other poem,it's different,detailed, and really-well written(:
Thanks for letting me read this(:

This a absolutley amazing. It's beautiful. : )

Lovely. So very, very, lovely. I'm going to put aside my rhyming needs, because this is gorgeous no matter what. The entire feel, the delicately applied imagery (did I even word that right? I don't even know. It's great imagery, though) adds excellent dimension to the entire piece, and just... ah! I don't know what to say, besides that I really do love this poem!

Oh, this is absolutely lovely!

Your use of juxtaposition is beautiful. I think my favourite line was [i]"tethered dreams that fought for freedom"[/i]. It creates a phsyical image, but also a very strong mental one as well and it's gorgeous.

Also, your alliteration is amazing. The "s" you use in [i]"seek solace in the solstice sky"[/i] is such an appropriate, soft sound to use and almost sounds like a sigh itself, which you mention two lines before. It's a very clever thing to do and you've done it very, very well indeed.

It's just stunning.

Wow...i truly can't think of a way that i can explain how beautiful this peom is. It is a really sweet poem, and i absolutely love it!!!! i really enjoyed it. I like the whole idea that she's giving a toast. I love the words you chose, and the way you wrote it because that's what makes it so beautful...wow..=)

This was lovely.

[i]To seek solace in the solstice sky.[/i]--I love this live very much. I have to say, this literally took my breath away. It was written so nicely, and I read it so smoothly. I also really loved the [i]That left her feeling small As the grains of sand beneath her toes[/i]. Brilliant. <3

UMMM!!!!! THIS IS AMAZING! I love it. Not lying, at all :D. its about a girl remembering her past right? but now she's alone... ?