Ablation - Comments

Even though the poem was a bit hard to follow, as others have pointed out, it was beautifully written. The flow was a bit choppy at points but otherwise well handled, and the imagery was outstanding. You have an eye for detail and certainly appear to know your strengths in terms of writing. However, like I said, it was a tad confusing. Perhaps it was the way the poem was ordered, but there were parts where you're intentions of writing were unclear and a bit disconnected.

Overall, I'd probably give this 8/10. It was a pleasure to read.

Good description but a little hard to follow. Try to make it more clear on what or who you are describing. Suggestion would be to describe one thing or person in each stanza.

Well, the poem was a little confusing. For a moment I thought you were talking about the sun then I thought the moon because only moons stay with on planet. But when you said flesh, I thought of a person in space.

The imagery was nice but it was hard to tell when you intended to imagine.