Bereavement - Comments

The writing style is unique and even if it is in a sentence structure, it doesn't mistake itself for an actual sentence. I was surprise though when I read it, I could immediately tell it was a poem by the words. It's really good Josh.

I read this twice, and let me tell you I felt absolutely no hope the second time around. I can't even believe that. I usually have some back up reserve but..nada. I just don't understand how you pull readers in that deep with just a few sentences. A whole monolouge on fear nicely written I can understand, BUT A FEW SENTENCES! Its amazing. :D Honestly and truely.

That was very descriptive. I noticed that you can make a poem short or long and it still rocks!! With me I have to make my poems long in order for them to sound decent or good. You have a talent and you manipulate words well. :)

Very nice //.^

Holy crap.

Kool ^_^

Chilling:)
Very descriptive, a lot of meaning packed into such a short poem.

i love how even though these are relly short there meaning is powerful,

i really like this great job but you might want to format the poem more like this:
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you dont have to take my feedback.
i really LOOOOVE this poem, though.

Wonderfull Josh.

I just really love this.
I wish it was longer./: