I Hate It - Comments

I agree, the idea of this poem is great. Maybe just try to make it flow more smoothly and add some emotion to it. Really great overall idea though! Good luck:)

It felt choppy to me, I hate giving comments like this but I really wasn't feeling this poem. The idea behind it was great maybe if you reworded some of it or added a bit more passion to it.. I am not sure. Also line two threw off the poem for me too. Just because it made no sense, actually there were other lines that made no sense either. Just read through it again because you were onto something great with this poem.