Do You Care? - Comments

Wow, this was amazing and it was incredibly sad. The narrator's emotions just jump off the page, and you can totally feel the raw pain and emotion that she's going through. It makes me feel sad that she's not angry with the person who caused her so much pain and hurt, that she's not raging at them, but she's more weeping and feeling sad and you can just imagine how destroyed she must feel. I love your descriptions in here, your sentences flow so smoothly in a nice, rhythmical pace. Well done, keep up the good work <33 I'm off to read [b]The Artist[/b], as a thank you for being such a good commenter on [b]Dreaming with a Broken Heart[/b]. :3

This is very descriptive for a poem. I love it. The only thing I would have to say is maybe add commas for pauses here and there.

Oh, wow. The pure, raw emotion in your poem threatens to drown the reader in its sorrow! I found your work of art beautiful and heart-breaking. I love the description you use. The way you continue to ask the questions you did; almost as if you are trying to throw all your rage and sorrow at the one who inspired this masterpiece.

The words seem to flow with a nice rhythm. It's nice to read something so wonderful. I've always had a soft spot for things that make me sad. I don't know why. Just that you made me feel sad should be an accomplishment--isn't that the whole point of writing? To get the reader to feel your emotion?

Fantastic job!

I love this poem, it's awesome!