I dont usually read poetry, so I am not exactly sure what to be looking for.
But I liked how it was dark and everything and it wasnt in traditional style. Heh, but yeah, I liked it.
Um very strong meaning behind this poem. Just a worming you have to be careful about the rating system. You can't have a poem as rated G and put down the F-bomb. So I would suggest going up a rating or fixing the poem to make it G.