well, i certainly loved the rhyme scheme going on, i'ma sucker for rhyming poems since i write them the most. =} that line about your feeling being "hid" got to me...a different term perhaps because the use of "hid" was incorrect, sorry sorry i am a grammar natzi (more known for being a spelling nazi because i suck at grammar too a lot of times haha!)
but i really liked this, thanks for telling me to read it! =} i'm sorry if you're going through a rough time though, things will get better. i really liked that line about her changing and paying more attention to the boys, i can't go back and look but i think you'll know what i'm referring to.
but i really liked this, thanks for telling me to read it! =} i'm sorry if you're going through a rough time though, things will get better. i really liked that line about her changing and paying more attention to the boys, i can't go back and look but i think you'll know what i'm referring to.
overall: GREAT JOB YOU LOVELY POET! =D