Unspoken Crimes - Comments

I didn't like this poem Hara...I LOVED IT!!! lol. It's amazing! my favorite part was Crowns made of glass
Kings made of ash
It was foolish to think
They could show her the way

It just really catches and holds my attention and I read it like three times lol. So beautiful...makes me wanna cry lol anyway, amazing job =)

Amazing as always! I absolutely love it!!!!!!
My favorite parts (all of it, but it's silly to repost the whole poem again) XD

'Dark cloudy skies
Betrayed goodbyes
She now only believes
In hearts black like coal'

'The monster inhales
Burning all veils
That chase away darkness
And embraces
Her treacherous heart'

‘Crowns made of glass
Kings made of ash
It was foolish to think
They could show her the way’

‘But that voice of the past
Speaks of hope that won't last
And those unspoken crimes of the heart she once thought that she knew’

CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT ONE!!!!!!!!!! ;D

Loved it. <3

It's great as usual! I think that it is your second poem with rythm! I love it! I am charmed of the two lines " crowns made of glass/kings made of ash", I don't know why... My second favourite part is this:
But the voice of the past
Speaks of hope that won't last
And those unspoken crimes of the heart she once thought that she knew

Great! Keep writing!

Wow, this is really good. Everything flows together so perfectly, and it's hard to make a good rhyme. These are the parts that stood out to me: She now only believes
In hearts black like coal

Welcoming blackness
She no longer wants
To tear apart

She caused her own fall
Trusted them all
Unable to bear
The face they hid
Behind the mask

Though she can't find the light
In the dawn of the night
There are times
She wants to start anew

I now understood ^^ Awesome as usual =) Congrats!

Mmm my english really sucks xD