Eat the Bullet or Pull the Trigger - Comments

This is really creative.

[i]So instead I'll eat this bullet
Not put it where it belongs
Inside your heart
Where I should have been all along[/i] That was my favorite part. The flow there is just perfect. It's perfect through out the whole poem but... I just really liked the ending lines. <3 This is really, really good. Where's the favorite but when you need it! You're a great writer!

I don't know if you've thought about using punctuation or not. Punctuation makes the poem less confusing for the reader. But I know many poems do not have punctuation so to create a sense of obscurity. Just pointing that out if you haven't thought about it.
Personally, I would at least add question marks.
Anyway, I love the last four verses the best. Especially the metaphor of 'eat the bullet'. Nice work with your amazing metaphors.

Man. This was intense, really. I absolutely adore the lines about second thoughts. It's very clever. The flow in this was as good as most poems and I'm glad. I like the concept of the whole poem, too. You're obviously very creative and you put it to good use. I'd definitely count this as one of my favorites on Mibba.