I felt like I was reading the lyrics to a Rise Against song! I really like the emotion behind all of the words and as I was reading it I couldn't help but invision the French revolution or another famous uprising. This poem had good flow too.
This is really good:) you should def ad music to it:)
This is unbelievably amazing! I can hear music to it in my head already. It's really well written and like everyone else has said this sounds like it'd be an awesome rock/ metal song. Good job!
And you're not famous because...? Like [b]Miss I'm Fine[/b] said, this sounds like a rock, not necessarily screamo, but rock song! If you get famous because of this poem/song, keep singing it!
This was...scary and beautiful and corrupted all in one. I GIVE YOU A STANDING OVATION!
This sounds like a totally awesome rock/screamo song. I myself don't listen to screamo but this would make me listen xD It was wel written, and just reading it aloud lets me know that there is a good flow to it. Good job :)
This is really good:) you should def ad music to it:)