I really enjoyed your use of rhyme, I also commend you on that because rhyme is a difficult thing to master. I will happily say I feel that you did master it, I think your use of rhyme was spot on and amazingly used. I liked that it was in the couplet rhyme pattern. I think the words you chose to rhyme were quite genius. The rhyme also made a poem about such a heavy topic come off a little “lighter” so to speak, which I think is a good thing.
I think that is there was one thing I could give as constructive criticism would be maybe the line break. Sometimes it’s interesting to break up sentences in the middle of them, it adds tension and it adds suspense as well. It makes for the poem to be a little more captivating and it makes the poem a little more complex.
I felt that the ending almost dismissed everything you said before, but not in a bad way. I think having the last line separated from the rest of the poem was really clever. I think that it created a break and a tension in the poem. I think tension in poetry is key because it adds to the wow factor of the overall poem.
I think the poem was really well written and I enjoyed reading it a lot. Great job!
I think that is there was one thing I could give as constructive criticism would be maybe the line break. Sometimes it’s interesting to break up sentences in the middle of them, it adds tension and it adds suspense as well. It makes for the poem to be a little more captivating and it makes the poem a little more complex.
I felt that the ending almost dismissed everything you said before, but not in a bad way. I think having the last line separated from the rest of the poem was really clever. I think that it created a break and a tension in the poem. I think tension in poetry is key because it adds to the wow factor of the overall poem.
I think the poem was really well written and I enjoyed reading it a lot. Great job!