This is a fantastic poem. It honestly brought a tear to my eye when I read it. I wish I could write this well and I admire your talent. There's just some sort of rhythm to it that seems subtle and yet noticeable. I like how it draws the reader along and with an irresistible beckoning and a pace that makes the lyric flow over you like waves of melancholy. This is one of the most moving poems I've read in a long time.
On a side note, I'm also quite impressed by your astute grammar and punctuation!
On a side note, I'm also quite impressed by your astute grammar and punctuation!