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  • second-hand smoke

    second-hand smoke (150)

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    -Judging for a contest-
    I loved the way you chose to tell the story in this poem through the child’s point of view. Using a child’s voice really got across the message to the audience and I’m sure you made a few people cry! I know I nearly did. The structure was a tad awkward, but you redeemed yourself with clever rhymes and the careful repetition that really delivered your message. Great work! :)
    December 31st, 2010 at 04:39am
  • Unintentional

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    Naww... that's not THAT depressing
    it's really good, i likes it.
    i agree with all the other commenters... it is really sweet.
    January 11th, 2009 at 03:14pm
  • ButteredKenobi

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    Aww, that's so sweet, is it true?
    What happened to your Daddy?
    October 22nd, 2008 at 06:46pm
  • Christelline

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    That's really sweet.
    August 21st, 2008 at 12:04am
  • Squirely_wrath

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    awwe thats so sweet!

    but upsetting =[
    July 21st, 2008 at 06:53pm
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