"Ease" - Comments

I figured I'd just go through all your poetry XD I like how short and simple this is, and how the long lines almost make it seem like you're rushing to the point. And I love the rhyming. I'm quite a fan of that. I think this works very well as it is. You have good editing skills, so these comments tell me! Emotional curve is fantastic, and everything just kind of flows together and every thought is interconnected. Great poem.

Yeah that 8th line is better now! Really, really love it, it's great! xD

Really good! Really well written, sounds very 'pretty' but then not, at the same time. Okay, that doesn't make sense at all but that was my first impression from your poem!

It's very well written, the only criticism I could make is that you could maybe rethink some of the lines (more so in the final verse) so that the syllables match up. It sounds great, but if the syllables were mroe equal on each line, the poem as a whole might flow better.

Other than that, really great :) enjoyed reading it :D

Okay, this sounds much better now that you've changed it around! The last verse now sounds really great!

The only thing I still find a little odd is the 'possibly' in the 8th line, I think it might read a little better if you just left that word out, and it doesn't affect the way the verse is read as a whole which is good.

Either way, sounds much better now, and it's beautifully written! Don't know how you do it, writing poetry is the hardest thing ever! haha but you've done a great job, sounds amazing :)

I love it. :)