i like the first -aww whats the word ? whats the word, i hate it when this happens - yeah thats it, the first stanza. and the last line, that ones just wonderful, but the rest plz dont be mad at me or something but they are just words, this must hurt your feeling or something, but i still hope it wont, but you just blah-blah-blah-ed. it was so pretty, like you were talking to your lover or something, and then you went the other way around and started writing some kind of emo song or something -no ofence- i dont mean to be mean, but i think you should like continue the lover talking thing, and make the i am not okay thing into an other poem, or something
i hope this doesnt upset you, i really do