June 26th, 2011 at 06:50am
It is awsome, I noticed a few spelling errors though. I like the use of emotional expression but if I were you i would perhaps add some images, not literal ones you understand but ones that help the reader under stand the true depth of feeling. The way you can do this is use interesting refrances to normal things. A classical one is: the sword cut through flesh like a hot knife through butter. I would use stuff like that but make it original and have it be extreemly poetical in its description.
Over all it is pretty good, thanks for leting me read it
Phanes
Im in the process of learning American Sign Language and I love the language.
I know hearing is something you might wish for, but honestly I think a world without sound would be just as beautiful.
You're a beautiful person. And being deaf is just another part of you. Like being black. And like how im white and I can hear. We're all different but we're all the same.
By the way, amazing way of writing it. :)
Miss you Tee!
<3~~Beah