You Didn't Mind When I was Sleeping - Comments

  • JHUZE

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    omg thats so sad :'(
    September 5th, 2008 at 01:28am
  • MissMagnoliaWebber

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    I love this!-- your rhyming is superb and you can tell there's quite a bit of emotion in this piece-- the one thing I would work on would be setting up a sense of metre-- one of my own struggles-- I admit. Keep Writing though.
    ~Maggie
    September 5th, 2008 at 01:27am