Broken China - Comments

i think it's great! i can kinda relate in a weird sort of fashion and i lyk the endin and how it's kinda lyk a unrequired love type thing. i know that's not what you meant but to me it means that.

I like it, but the swaering in this kind of poetry makes it awkward. And the end is the worst part, but overall, it's a beautiful piece. And it would be even more beauf\tiful if you'd work on those two things.