originally the argument was in different colours, blue and red but i don't know if 1) you can get colours on here and 2) how to do them even if you could, also don't know how to put things in italics yet so sorry for the confusion.
this is great. i like how it starts out simple, and grows into this intricate story.
and the lines 'this tale is taken from where the gathered crowd saw it themselves' and 'you do not go to a better place/just one that needs you' are fantastic.
my only real complaint would be that the argument between the two people 'if you hadn't fed his mind/He was obsessed, etc.' is a bit confusing at first; maybe make one speaker italics and another regular text? idk, just my opinion.
and beautiful
and niftily written
^__^ <33