July 6th, 2011 at 02:05am
This has to be my favorite.
It's incredibly powerful, for one thing, and I'm diggin' the shit out of it, cuz it totally captures the way I've felt before.
I've honestly felt this sort of hopless before.
And oh, have I questioned myself and God if there are better things than what life can give.
But wow, IDK.
This is just very... wow, it's incredible, and I think you are an insanely gifted poet.
I also think you need to try and make a push toward using REAL things. No vague generalizations - Believe, promise, become like this, all time low, etc. Try to show those things. It'd really improve this piece.