Broken - Comments

TheOneLeftBehind (100)

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i think its an awesome poem... leave the references to yourself:)

July 19th, 2010 at 12:24am

serizenna (100)

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Lose the references to yourself and it will be good.

May 28th, 2009 at 04:59pm

lyrical findings (100)

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I am really finding this here poem intriguing to reread over and over again. The concept is incredlibly pharsed into your own words. You seem to have a natural forte for poetry! I would only advise that you might place a comma in the first line between sight and out. Other than that, this poem was really breathtaking with strong power and emotion.

May 25th, 2009 at 03:37pm