December 18th, 2008 at 11:44am
Wow, just wow. This story is absolutely amazing. :]
I am so curious as to how it will end though.
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December 17th, 2008 at 10:05pm
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Even with the doom and gloom of Elaine's suicide this still manages to be all sweet and warm and fuzzy and I could go on with fluffy words, but I won't.
I think the way John and Kay feel about each other, yet they won't tell the other is realistic, as thats the way it is for some people anyway, although not necessarily in the same situation, but I think you get what I mean.
And I can't wait to see how all this ends. :cute:
And thank you again for the shameless reccing. :tehe:December 17th, 2008 at 08:31pm -
Oh bah, this story isn't pointless.
It's wonderful :arms:
You write this so well, and god, Kay and her sister's situation...whoah.
Again, next time you update I will leave better feedback :arms: I'm sorry.November 17th, 2008 at 03:22am -
:) great update lovelyNovember 14th, 2008 at 11:25pm
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:cheese: I absolutely love this.
You're an amazing writer <33November 9th, 2008 at 04:29am -
My second pathetic excuse for feedback. I'm sorry.
This update was so beautifully written in such a sad way. You really feel for Kay, who can't even use the bathroom because of what happened in there.
Kay is such a sad character but she's got an ever-so-slight optimism about her which I love.
This line got me bloody going in tears, However it seemed that what she had to face now would break her. She couldn't be the girl that she always was. It would be impossible for her.
You are such a fucking amazing writer. And you should get heaps of readers and feedback because this story is so bloody good! :arms:
Sorry this amazing story got shitty feedback again.
November 9th, 2008 at 03:03am -
Beautifully written.
Great job, can't wait for another update. =)November 8th, 2008 at 11:48pm -
That last chapter was written so beautifully.
I'm loving the overall gloomy-ness of it.November 8th, 2008 at 11:05pm -
I really like it.
You should keep going.November 8th, 2008 at 08:01pm -
And now I see.
That was cute. The way you described the cot was lovely, and it doesn't drag the story down. Just perfect amounts of description. :)October 31st, 2008 at 08:27pm -
I love this story.
So. Fucking. Much.
I really feel sorry for Kay, she's so undermined and this line here:
Kay knew that Elaine would have wanted her to stay in her apartment. Kay's mother hadn't the heart to sell the place and Kay's father was too busy immersing himself in work so as to ignore the grief that was slowly festering away inside him.
It makes you feel so sorry for Kay because her parents aren't giving her any time.
And the part with the baby.
Oh wow.
Your writing makes me go AWW.
You are so good at describing everything.
& in response to your readers, comments and subscribers situation, don't give up! Because not only will you make me very sad because I'll never know what'll happen, but sometimes it takes a little while for the story to pick up readers and subscribers. Its like a snowball effect. :arms:October 31st, 2008 at 07:11pm -
No keep going! I just read all three chapters and even though I'm not completely sure what's going on, I like it!October 31st, 2008 at 08:02am
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I love this.
You're an amazing writer (:October 31st, 2008 at 02:13am -
Oh Nina, I love this so far.
& John Oh. Naturally.
This simply can't be your last story either :(
You're so talented Ninaaaa.October 29th, 2008 at 09:48pm -
Ok I've calmed down a bit, and hopefully this feedback will be better.
Wow.
The opening was absolutely incredible.
This description is absolutely stunning: Generally speaking John was the sunny boy, the one who could never do wrong and even if he did, he did it with that adorable faces of his that made you forget any grievances that he might have caused you. You can really picture John as one of those angelic, perfect people. Great image.
And when Kay came in...wow, things heated up! Her rage is absolutely perfect for her character and you can really feel her anger and hurt that he didn't show up.
And then that bombshell!
:cheese:
I am so intrigued and you are an amazing writer.
Damn all those people who didn't leave feedback. I'm gonna go whore this story now.October 29th, 2008 at 09:23pm -
Wow, I'm confused.
Did John cheat on Elaine with Kay? Or is her baby somebody elses?
Ehhh I'll find out with time :)
Lovely update.October 29th, 2008 at 05:31pm -
It's doomy and gloomy so far.
I love it. :)
And I can't wait to see where you'll take this next.October 27th, 2008 at 05:51pm -
NO NO THIS CAN'T BE YOUR LAST!
What will I do without your awesome writing?
I'm pretty sure I've left you detailed feedback for this in an email, but whatevs, I'll leave it on here too.
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I love the opening, first of all. I like how it's ever so slightly optimistic, because of the weather. If that makes sense?
I think Kay's character is amazing. She's really complex and I can't wait to see you develop her. She's one of those characters you can really empathise with.
This line is incredible: The mouth of the Priest was moving and yet Kay heard no words. She could only hear the steady beat of her own heart pumping louder and louder in her ears. You can really feel her grief as if it was your own.
I can't think of anything else that I didn't say in the email...:think:
It was beautifully written, anyhows. LOVE IT.October 26th, 2008 at 06:08pm
I love this story though, and I love how you described Kay and John's relationship as both caring for each other so much but keeping this truth silent and sleeping. It's really significant.
And their kid is so adorable, bless her. I love how her first word was "Papa", tis really sweet. And her second was mama! Bless. :XD
It's really sad how he has to go on tour. You can see that Kay's really upset about it, but she's trying to not let on that she's sadder than shes making it out to be.
...and that sentence made no sense. :cheese:
The last sentence is so sad and hard-hitting, too. Like, how everybody is leaving her.
I'm really intrigued at how this story is panning out and I can't wait to see how it ends!